Сердце в тясячу свечей (Ирина Дубцова) / The 1000 lumen heart (Irina Dubtsova) - updated version

After singing my translation for a couple of days, I came up with a couple of small corrections.

1000-Lumen Heart

I have set you free,

I know you desire

The shade of another tree.

Go soar in the sky,

But close to the fire

Of lightings please do not fly.

And I will stay here,

And I will be telling time and time again

To all of your friends and the silent rooms

That all their hope is in vain.

Chorus:

The fire in my heart will shine above

The cold darkness of your night,

And will never dim, never go off

This 1000-lumen light.

The fire in my heart will shine above

The cold darkness of your night,

And will never dim, never go off

This 1000-lumen light.

And you were my tease,

And you were my peace,

And you were my war.

And you were strong,

And how do I long

So see you walk through my door.

And I will stay here,

And I will explain time and time again

To all silent rooms and friends who are calling

That all their hope is in vain.

Chorus:

The fire in my heart will shine above

The cold darkness of your night,

And will never dim, never go off

This 1000-lumen light.

The fire in my heart will shine above

The cold darkness of your night,

And will never dim, never go off

This 1000-lumen light.

Сердце в тясячу свечей (Ирина Дубцова) / The 1000 lumens heart (Irina Dubtsova) - my version

Whew, this song was a seriously tough one to translate. I was trying to hard to preserve the unique images of the original song while at the same time fighting the usual sentence-size issues, and, well, rhyming issues of course. I like my translation so far, except for the lack of rhyme of the "And I will stay here" piece...

1000-Lumen Heart

I have set you free,

I know you desire

The shade of another tree.

Go soar in the sky,

But close to the fire,

I beg you, please do not fly.

And I will stay here,

And try to explain time and time again

To all silent rooms and friends who are calling

That all their hope is in vain.

Chorus:

The fire in my heart will shine above

The darkness of your night,

And will never dim, never go off

This 1000-lumen light.

The fire in my heart will shine above

The darkness of your night,

And will never dim, never go off

This 1000-lumen light.

And you were my tease,

And you were my peace,

And you were my war.

And you were strong,

And how do I long

So see you walk through my door.

And I will stay here,

And try to explain time and time again

To all silent rooms and friends who are calling

That all their hope is in vain.

Chorus:

The fire in my heart will shine above

The darkness of your night,

And will never dim, never go off

This 1000-lumen light.

The fire in my heart will shine above

The darkness of your night,

And will never dim, never go off

This 1000-lumen light.

Сердце в тясячу свечей (Ирина Дубцова) / The 1000 lumens heart (Irina Dubtsova)

I discovered this song yesterday, and fell in love with it right away. I will try to translate it, but the structure of the rhymes in this song is pretty weird, so I might have to improvise and change the sequence of the rhymes a bit to make it work for a decent translation.

Расправь свои крылья, ведь ты же хотела
Сада другого тень.
Бери себе небо, но только сквозь грозы
Прошу тебя не лететь.

А я буду дома, 

А я буду долгими,
Долгими вечерами
Молчанью комнат, 

Звонкам знакомых
"Она ушла" отвечать

Припев:
Пламенем внутри я освещаю
Темноту твоих ночей.
Не перегорит, я обещаю
Сердце в 1000 свечей.

Пламенем внутри я освещаю
Темноту твоих ночей.
Не перегорит, я обещаю
Сердце в 1000 свечей.

А ты была милой, 

А ты была миром 

Моим и была войной
А ты была гордой, 

А я бы всё отдал
Вернуть бы тебя домой

А я буду дома, а я буду долгими
Долгими вечерами
Молчанью комнат, звонкам знакомых
"Она ушла" отвечать

Припев:
Пламенем внутри - я освещаю
Темноту твоих ночей
Не перегорит, я обещаю
Сердце в 1000 свечей

Пламенем внутри - я освещаю
Темноту твоих ночей
Не перегорит, я обещаю
Сердце в 1000 свечей

Ok, first of all, as usual, here is the word-for-word translation:


Spread your wings, since you wanted
To enjoy the shade of another orchard.
Take the whole sky, but please I ask you
Not to fly through the lighting.

I will stay behind, and for many long
Long nights
Explain to the silent rooms and the inquiring friends
That you have left

Chorus:

The fire from my heard is lighting up
The darkness of your nights
And will never dim, I promise,
This 1000 lumens heart

The fire from my heard is lighting up
The darkness of your nights
And will never dim, I promise,
This 1000 lumens heart


And you were so sweet,
And were my peace
And you were my war.
And you were so heart strong,
And I would give up all
To bring you back.

I will stay behind, and for many long
Long nights
Explain to the silent rooms and the inquiring friends
That you have left


Chorus:

The fire from my heard is lighting up
The darkness of your nights
And will never dim, I promise,
This 1000 lumens heart

The fire from my heard is lighting up
The darkness of your nights
And will never dim, I promise,
This 1000 lumens heart